chevyvent
chevyvent
Jun 19, 2017

Solitude

whispers
a rain drop
quietness
seclusion
look inside we have nothing to hide
a premonition
seclusion

the woods
through the forest we see a glimmer of light
the absence of the good brings on the bad
Surrender to the force
quick conclusions will often lead the best of us astray,
the wisest move in life is but to wait
otherwise our galloping emotions run away,
like horses at the gate
spirituality
alone

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Wolcott, Ct. USA

Favorite Poets: John Ashbery & Major Jackson

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

7 years 10 months ago

this could be two poems. I so enjoyed the first half of this.
The second part could use a bit of work though. I'd say that at least half of your lines are too long.
I'm sure that if you try, you can make them shorter to fit the rhythm/pace, without changing the meaning of the line. Your title is ok. ~ Geezer.
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