My Love Of Books

Loved this one it is short and to the point, one thing you can do in future is flower the words up a little, try to hold the reader needing more as they read your pieces, keep a little behind just out of reach.
Sometimes write your thoughts bare, do this on word edit to a smooth run then stream..
Otherwise a great second write.
Yours, Ian..

I learnt today about Joy Division hand making 100 album covers with sand paper. So that when people pulled their album out of the case it would rub others up, and deface.
So, I think, what I've learnt from this, is enjoy each page, cover to cover, but don't think it'll be the same again when you go back. Cause it might be scratched......

yeah, your write may be a little rough, specifically that very last line, but the message comes through loud and clear: Treat your books gently! And that's why I keep my favorite hardcover books behind glass, but those paperback ones, like Lady Chatterley's Lover, I read while in the bathtub. Why not change your title to simply, "Books."
Ali

for sheer profundity.
This engaged me very much, with my own voracious appetite for reading. I've averaged three books a week (one classic/poetry, one sci-fi/fantasy, one non-fiction) for the last fifty years. If nothing else it does wonders for the vocabulary and makes one very hard to beat in any argument [smiles].

I think your last few words reveal that although you like rhyme you are already encountering it's limitations. You've been using rhyming couplets AABBCC but there are many other patterns to explore. Alternate rhyme ABABCDCD, or enclosed rhyme ABBA CDDC to name a few.

Also google and play with alliteration, consonance and assonance.

I believe you have a native talent and a natural ear for poetry but a "litel buk larnin neva hirt no wun".

Have fun. Try a limerick. My favourite is-
There is a young man in Japan
whose poems just never will scan
he sits up all night
but try as he might
he always ends up putting as many words in the last line as he possibly can.

or haikus are also a fun way to compress and enhance your poetic expression without any poetic devices other than the syllable count 5-7-5.

Welcome to Neopoet! I enjoyed the poem and the conversation going on here. Lots of learning to go around! :)

I am not great with rhyme, but a tool I love to use which gives rhymes, synonyms, and more is rhymezone.com. It may help you as a lover of rhyme!

What about changing the end words to avoid the in-within rhyme, since you said you weren't exactly feeling it?

Maybe something like:

Novels, in which to deeply delve
Journals, letters of ourselves

Hope this helps,
Kelsey

You never cease to amaze me and may not need my help. I will still try, but you should keep writing as you do. As Jess pointed out, rhyme is a whole other thing to explore.

another lovely idea, expressed in this poem.
Books are so precious aren't they. I absolutely hate it, if someone bends a paperback to hold it open and creases the spine. My god, I need therapy after that.
Me, anal............ nah - well perhaps a bit - cheesy grin.
You've had some good advice on this thread, try new rhyming patterns, make alternate lines rhyme, or perhaps just two lines out of four. Anything really.
Try and raise your vocabulary up a bit from the everyday. There is nothing wrong with the every day, it's just nice to play with new words from time to time. Just have the odd dictionary or thesaurus for breakfast, quite tasty with chocolate milk! Don't be afraid to give it a go.
I agree with Ali, the message is loud and clear, which is great, but the delivery is a little awkward in places the last stanza particularly. I mean it's a bit stumbly when you read it, it lacks the easy flow

You had asked earlier about rhythm and it's the rhythm which is off in the in and within lines. You might try "Novels I love to disappear in"- "journals or letters from deep within'. Just an idea from my hollow head lol. I also love book and I don't mean E-books........stan

as poets we are passionately fond of books. In Manhattan, the so called literary capital of USA (publishing etc), there are now perhaps 4 bookstores left. 25 years ago they were as popular as Starbucks. You might consider the current demise of books, as a sub theme. What will the world be like without books? How will we publish a book of poems, if there's no place to buy them?

You might enjoy the Sci/fi Book Fahrenheit 451, in which all books were outlawed so people "became" the books, memorizing them and passing them down to the next generation.

I'm not going to comment on your style and craft as yet.
Keep em coming, craft will come.

you are ahead of me by a couple of years. I was 13 when I wrote my first poem. It was only six lines but they have stayed with me to this day. I am now 65. A couple of suggestions for trimming but don't forget its your poem, take or leave as you will.

Books with turns so well defined.

and all over shelves have been shoved