As a captain
at forty
I do take it
you are from
the Navy
If I recall correctly
long ago
as Loved
I had read thee
You are a Romantic
poet indeed
who bases all poetry
on the pedestal
where one stood
himself
Though it's not required
naturally
poetry must have a seed
like one of a man's
but it must be
nourished
by another one
normally, like a lady
who bears
along with thee,
It so appears
you had a love
she didn't know
it was you
and
so ran after some others too
till they kicked her
then she came running to you
upon your shoulders
for sympathy and rest,
If it be so true
a poet also is you
who leads
majority into kindly light
yet with a different hue
If it so be true
a grand Neo are you
too
Addendum
With regards
from old Loved
now Lovedly
Remember me
do you....
Comments
Not a gem.
Who is the 'you' referred to?
For the umpteenth time if you actually banged two brain cells together whilst writing, if you weren't too lazy to learn some poetic techniques beyond cheap, contrived rhyme.
If you didn't attempt to be pretentious by using archaic English,
if you spent time on each poem instead of projectile vomitting them onto the page,
you could produce more real gems.
You make me so angry because you have real talent but won't use and develop it.
loved the raw truth a guy composed a poetry
my brain went a la senti
and machine gunned it
shall reinvent it into a
GEM
likely
Thanks Jess
you alone don't prank
nor digress
and if I'm rude
at least it's because I care.
i have,
I have read most of your poetry though I have not always commented. I really love some of the verse you write, but have difficulty when trying to follow your train of thought. Jess may just have hit the nail on the head, but I would hate it if you changed to much. Regards Roscoe...
thanks for your
graceful comments
Sir Roscoe
REGARDS
Loved
COMMENTS of the Captain.... non military
'''Thank you1
wow! thank you Lovedly.
I'm honored by such a response!
Your interpretation is pretty accurate.
However, I am not in the military...
Captain is just an old nickname
my friends gave me.
long story.
Thanks for the nice compliments in your poem and for such a heartfelt response.
It is very crafty. I hope to have many more chats with you!
Good night from the desert. its getting hot here!! Hope all is well in Romania. ''''''