It's in the tingle
of a hot ginger toddy
that turns me on
when my body
needs some fire
or
it's in the tingle
of a hot ginger 'body'
that turns me on
when my totty
needs some fire
It's in the tingle
of a hot ginger toddy
that turns me on
when my body
needs some fire
or
it's in the tingle
of a hot ginger 'body'
that turns me on
when my totty
needs some fire
Last Few Words: word play foreplay
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
A nice pun Ells
I like the first version best as it makes more sense for me, but all in all there is something to ponder in both.
keep writing.
LOL
good stuff Betty, funny as hell!
Read this,
Read this yesterday but had to run before i could comment, i was trying to think of a humorous comment. Anyway getting back to today, i loved this very good poem. Love Roscoe..
I read this when you first
I read this when you first posted it. Sorry that I did not leave any comment. I will try to be better about that in the future.
There isn't much to say on this one other than it's great. I flowed nicely and I especially liked the "suggestive" tone of it. I feel like you offered just enough to draw the reader in.
Scott
Re. As per 'Hot Ginger'
Not only have you been a fantastic writer to me, but you have taught me how write to inspire other people. Thank you for being such a great role model.