Like parachutes the snowflakes fall
from the winter sky of lead
as I stand and watch them all
from within the old woodshed.
The first snowfall of this new year
covers all with pristine white.
A scarlet redbird flitters near
splashing color in the fading light.
All the livestock has been fed
with summer hay stored long ago
the last of my chores put to bed.
I pause although I ought to go.
For my thin hair is also white
from all the new years left behind
as I approach some final night.
I turn banning such thoughts from mind.
Then walk on toward the lights of home
while snow clouds freeze and break above
knowing no matter how I roam
I can return to my abode and love.
Comments
hello
Which forum might that be? Matters not, good of you ton take time to read and comment................stan
Hi Stan
I love this piece, The imagery is wonderful. 2 thumbs up.
Alid
Hi Alid
Pleased you like it. Hope all is well with you................stan
Of course...
you have been missed! I was just thinking about how I hadn't seen anything of your work lately.
Your title is good, and it seemed to flow well, your word usage is good as ever and I thought that the theme was well presented and typical of your style. Only one little niggle and I thought that maybe you might re-write the last line of the stanza to read something like:[ I turn, such thoughts banned from mind.] I must say, that this is one of the best metered poems of yours that I have read in a while. Hang in there, Old Man Winter is about done, Sister Spring is on the way.~ Gee
Hi Gee
Good to be back if only now and then. I was afraid I'd been gone so long I'd be forgotten..............stan
Welcome back
Stan. Always great to read you. Hope all is well. How did yor knees operatin go? I thought winter time is not the best time when you have such pain.
Greetings Rula
Doctors thinks recovery is going well for only 2 months but I'm impatient and think I should be pole vaulting already lol.. But walking is much easier than it was and I plan to have other knee replaced in 2018. ThaT WAY i'LL HAVE MATCHING SCARS AND CAN MAYBE WIN A PRETTY LEGS CONTEST LOL...................STAN.dAMNED LIbRAry comp caps lock is acting up...................stan
see how you have been missed
For my thin hair is also white
from all the new years left behind
WONDERFUL NEW YEARS so many gone more will come ...
so gradually your hair also
be prepared to abandon
see how you have been missed
in a way I am happy
no one will miss me
as poetry seldom comes to me
as it does Stan to thee
My memory is now sinking
O what is poetry
Only Stan knows
what is 'tis
says loved nolie ly
hi loved
You might find it hard to believe but I've missed you also lol.Thanks for dropping by......stan
LOL Thanks
You might find it VERRRRRRYYYY verrryyyyyyyy
hard to believe
but I've missed you also lol.
Thanks Stan
'i can return to Love and home'
on my last line crusade..
always the vivid scenes
and I view them through the same
lens when I do actually get out
daring the dog walk and chance
meeting with other dogs...
like the snow falling parachute line
thank U scribbler!
Mr Wolf!
Hi Steven
Alas your suggestion breaks rhyme. Also I'm presently so limited in comp time as to not be able to squeeze in time for many edits...........yet. lol.......................I appreciate your time and thought. That last line Does need revision..............stan
thats okay dude...your work is excellent!
classic...actually took the dog up the hydro line
trail...now ski doo run..
dress shoes on...going up was tough
coming down was crazy...but to have
woods on either side..city was at
base of hill...and im afraid of wolves
and coyotes...and the bush to be
honest....but being in the trees
was beautiful....
glad to see you back Scribbler
your writing is refreshing as the actual
walk....
Thank U
W
thank you
There are plenty of folks whose works are dark so I usually try for bringing peace to readers...................stan