Keith Logan
Keith Logan
Jan 22, 2017

Interesting

I read a sonnet, found it interesting,
The form is best used for proclaiming love
but this held naught about the joys of spring
or of that fondness fitting like a glove.
Instead it dwelt on questions beyond ken,
eternal strife does not begin or end.
As women stand one side, the other men,
can from such mire a victory ascend?

There is a love that asks for no return,
a giving thing that seeks another's good.
But as the giver's heart is left to yearn
the sacrifice is oft' misunderstood.

'Tis Godliness to give without receipt
to help another stand upon their feet.

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: United Kingdom (Scotland), GBR

Favorite Poets: Robert Burns

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Comments

themoonman

I've never had much interest in
sonnets, but in a course it is certainly
required. Often, while I appreciate
the counting, the delivery suffers for
the sake of obtaining the correct count.
You seem to be very good at it though,
you've obviously been at it for a long time.

A better title would help draw in the reads,
just an opinion.

Richard

Keith Logan

I lay it out as I see it:
The first eight lines set up a premise,
the next four expound on that,
the final couplet draws a conclusion.
Finally, I will consider your suggestion to work on a better title.

Candlewitch

good work with the lines of "love" and "glove" to make them go smoothly!

*always, Cat