lovedly
lovedly
Nov 25, 2016

untitled till you say

soon the lights
will dim
clouds will
veil the stars
what then will the sun
do in the morning
to tear
the curtain apart

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Keith Logan

has to be one of your best. It certainly demonstrates how good brevity can be.
Possible title: Daystar

Sparrow

This depicts a transition of many things young Bard and well written.
We leave this plain to journey on after learning of physical things.
I always believe that there is a place where the children play and beyond, so we will see another sun where the skies are always as we think them to be and oh so many think things that are beyond our memories.
I fear not to walk without legs and see without eyes and feel without touch, come have a cup of tea with me I shall always be there in think,
Yours Ian..
PS:- I did comment and you missed it !!

Sparrow

My opening words are This depicts a "Transition" and is the same as what Alid suggested, cant stop have to go to hospital for my Bionic eye Du Du Du..
Yours Ian..

alidzain

To me, this IS your BEST poem. Suggested title -Transition

Alid