My eyes, your views

The ignited candle
burns straight
till butterflies try
to it, penetrate

let the brightness of light
flame within the
candle
and
the world be
the harbinger of
calmness and
solitude...

the flickering fire glows
as ever, within
the wavering candle,
seemingly everlasting
is now no more

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

Comments

gem

thank you.
This deserves a read, youll find it on SoundCloud and the Facebook page Neopoet.com
https://soundcloud.com/neopoet/my-eyes-your-views

Thank you Jess

you wanted a gem
many liked it
your voice is majestic
adds beauty to verse
thanks to you
your student

Lovedly

finally !

As Jess says - a gem
now, no more waffle and piffle
we want more poems like this
love judy
xxx

indeed .....indebted to both

now I slowly compose
on my minds screen

then
erase it
till luminescence it reveals
takes time as
a gem needs to be polished

would you consider no more monkey business?

An infinite number of monkeys at typewriters would eventually produce Hamlet.
Rather than your machine gun effect of writing heedlessly to occasionally produce gems, why not think and learn a little bit, all the resources are here for you too learn.
Instead do learn, think more, write less, maybe, and turn out consistent crown of jewels?