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the 'Valley of Vision' - the plains of derision
has caught my eye - ripping out my bossom
lay captive my heart - tethering claws
captured my wandering mind - releasing nether the vagabond
your cup sends me reeling - tumbling venom-drenched
a haughty tower trembling - quivering in the night cold
never again to be rebuilt - ever awash on the shore
two men once hung from a tree - condemnation rife
the one cursed his life upon himself - excluded realities
the other condemned eternally - for him accursed vindication
neither the valley nor in the plain - hope prescribe
did the eye cast its mark - vision bright become
felled by projectile true - delight, darkened demise
a day no one can rue - smite the wanderlust of hope
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Comments
Your title VALLEY
put me aghast
how did u know
all about my valley???
i thought you were being visionary ,
i was earlier known as
vision
as PERHAPS
knowest thee.
I did not know
I just wrote that poem several years ago
without any knowledge of you or that vision
it could be any one's and everyone's vision - this poem
for each human on the planet has their own vision or two.
I am glad though that you have read and responded to this poem.
Cheers.
THANKS
REGARDS FROM VISION
CB
CB,
you always manage to write something that makes me stop in my tracks and read again in wonder.
You know I like structure and you have yet again offered a new structure with each line and the use of a dash - that adds something extra to the whole piece without stopping its flow.
Really liked the lines at the beginning being summarised in your own (off-centred) world at the end of each line.
Truly a master of structure.
A great read my friend,
HS ps. apologies for not commenting on your work recently - I've been a busy bee!
Many thanks HS
I deeply appreciate your visits and interaction/comments on my poems. Hope you don't ever tire. CB