Not just a piece of fabric
it has a tale to tell
now a souvenir
though its borders are now frail
On each thread is writ a verse
in intimate dialect
still moist
with lavender mist
to inhale, reminisce
those liquid moments in tranquil
The motifs now faded
but the verses keep saturating
from the eyes
ever alive
moistened by
those intimate moments
tugging at the heart strings....
Comments
hi raj
good one.
Alid
Thanks Alid for the read and
Thanks Alid for the read and comment...
Regards,
Wow!
Who said that the handkerchief is merely a fabric.
Amazing how you gave such a small piece of cloth such a history.
I really can't choose a favorite line, each verse stunned me!
Congrats!
Hi Rula
thanks for the read and your kind words of appreciation...
Regards,
Hi Raj
Very well written - wonderfully descriptive - worthy of a book! :)
Love Mand xxxx
Hi Mand
appreciate your taking time to read and kind words...good to know you liked it..
much love and hugs..
Good one
loved by this hopeless romantic.
Thanks Keith for the time,
Thanks Keith for the time, read and comment....
Regards,
Hi Rij,
Hi Rij,
I like both the idea and the presentation; also the originality gives it flavor.
"now a souvenir
though its borders are now frail"
it seem this handkerchief had a lot of work to do. Only, i am not so content wit the ending. Saying, only that those intimate moments were short lived, says nothing of the emotions that born them. May be something like, "that pulled at the heart". just the first thing to come to mind, but an example of what I mean by an emotional ending.
Hi tyro
thanks for the read comment and suggestive ending...i will think over it for sure...
Regards....
Hi again tyro
taking into consideration the merits of your suggestion, I have tweaked the concluding line. If you get time to visit this page again do let me know if it now works better...
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