I have a small ...
dull and silly mind
cannot concentrate
beyond 14 lines
as I am partially blind!
that's why I love sonnets
I am lovedly
new for thee
no last three lines
are not a haiku
I hate counting syllables
silly one's
once did it
I have a small ...
dull and silly mind
cannot concentrate
beyond 14 lines
as I am partially blind!
that's why I love sonnets
I am lovedly
new for thee
no last three lines
are not a haiku
I hate counting syllables
silly one's
once did it
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
You do not have a small, dull
You do not have a small, dull mind. And to have a silly mind, is I think a blessing, mine is very silly :-)
Your poetry is dynamic and alive. I'm not going to pretend I understand all of it, because occasionally I don't, but the fault lies with me and my restrictive abilities. The more I read your work, the more I will understand you.
I like this piece it has a great flow and is very honest.
Jx
so grateful ....as you walk the mile
each footstep of yours
places on my sullen face a smile
and
you will see me after a while
a free verse poet
worth one's poetic juvenile
so new friendly poet do smile
thanks for your kind style
I waffle mostly
ask raj and judy
hold it heretill tomorrow as no place/lockers for drafts in NEO
The anaconda competition
you love me
take me
eat me
I am delicious you know it
ice cream me
and
then I shall enjoy to stroke too
and
kill me by the throat
will you
as we swim within
take
love and see
but don't ever
betray me
coz I am a serpent
and
shall devour
what?
your anaconda
google it and see
what 'tis it
SEE!!!!
YOUR TWIN....
Nice one Lovedly sweetened
Nice one Lovedly sweetened with humor..
Regards,
hahahaa raj sublime.... as usual
honeyed lime
subbbbbb- lime
raj's poetry is fine
I love your confession
I'm just the same. You will notice few of my poems are of any real length. If I can't say it quickly I get bored and lose the plot. Confession time. I started writing poetry during an extended hospital stay. I could not concentrate to read, so I tried to write. The poetry of that time mainly concerned Jane Austen and the characters she created. Those poems were dire. Occasionally I will dig them out and try to do some salvage work on one or other of them. Indeed I posted one a week or two ago which I think elicited only a single comment. So take heart. As I wrote in one of my sonnets write first to please yourself.
birds of a feather must
flock together
I am hardly a poet
you know it!
Loved
In life we have enough people that criticise us, without us joining in the abuse, so as this piece is good, there is a need for you to get on with writing the short excellent pieces, we know you are capable of.
I wonder if there are some photos of our loved that would fit on the profile instead of roses ???
Take care young Bard and know we are there with you always, Yours Ian, plus..