vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
May 12, 2016

Rook Wind

Your voice is all that's heard,
at night in the upper lands
you batter at doors and rattle the caged
birds

But to fly with you in this night
would be insanity defined
just as to dance with you,
less refined

You roar and ring, ensnare my house
like a jealous lover, lusting for fire,
that stilled within, listening to you
with beating heart

I can't imagine what you do up there
in the dark hills, where my little
house sits, perched on a crag
waiting for you

To scoop up the valley in an elemental
tantrum, of flying twigs, swaying trunks
trees bent over like old men with canes
waving at you

And when you finally surge up that hill
and clasp the shrill tin roof that will
be singing of imminent calamity
will the wires break?

Will you leave enough to call me,
when this is all over, and your
channelling of the sea, rough as hell
is at dead calm?

And I can call you then, a breeze,
and no offence will be wafted at my door
no flotsam planted on the floor
no harm done?

And we'll call it quits till next year.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: It's that time of year again in When the winds get wild, i like to talk to it, maybe it helps, maybe we're a bit nuts down here, but it's that time of year. I like to personify an element and then have a chat with it - it's just a fun free way of creating and engaging I guess, i'm not sure what you call it. Its: https://simple.m.wikipedia.org/wiki/Personification I think.. Anybody out there?

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

judyanne

Do you think using 'you are' immediately at the beginning, instead of 'this wind is....' might not be more effective..?

I've known some winds - can relate to this
descriptive and emotive
love the ending

Good write
love judy
xxx

vandiemenspeak

Took your suggestion on board and made it more personal with 'Your voice' and tweaked the first line a bit. Hopefully reads better. Thanks for the input.

Take care,

Chris.

Keith Logan

Personification is a much favoured device for me. this poem is also replete with perfect, short descriptions. The wind was indeed an eloquent jealous lover lusting for life.

vandiemenspeak

Yes, personification is very creative, starting to play with it a bit more. And when your alone with the wind blowing your garden to bits, it does feel very personal!

Take care,

Chris