raj
Feb 17, 2016

Sound of a Poem

Sound of a poem
is that tiny drop of thought
creating ripples

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

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Comments

Geezer

if it is Haiku, but sure did like it! Short, sweet and succinct! ~ Gee

R

raj

9 years 2 months ago

Appreciate your time, read and comment. Good to know you liked it. You are right, it's not a Haiku but follows the 5-7-5 syllable sequence...

Seren

Seren

9 years 2 months ago

Applause Raj .. Brava ...

One of your absolute best my friend I am so glad i found it

Love and biggest hugs Jayne xxx

Rula

Rula

9 years 2 months ago

"Sound of poem" I thought this so poetic. It also personalizes poetry when you give it a thought.
I wished the third line would read more as separated from the two other lines. Try "ripples created " and see if you like it more.
I have already enjoyed :)

lovedly

a drop is just a drop
how is it small
or tiny?
I wonder
can you inject some wisdom in me
how soever
dropish tiny

Is a drop in the ocean
bigger than dew
how I wish I also knew
raj ur sublime_ocean

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raj

9 years 1 month ago

Here I have used "tiny drop" in the context of a thought...not sure if you find it right..

Regards,

Esker

Esker

9 years 1 month ago

great poem in so few chosen words

thank U!

(I watch the coffee fill my cup..poetry for this poet!)

S

These Japanese forms are great ways to capture snippets in a few lines aren't they? Good job......stan

R

Yes, I feel challenged to express a thought in short verses. Good to read your appreciative comment.

Regards,