Life was lived in moments
letting them slip
like sand through fingers
walking past them
leaving footprints
to be swept by a tide
little did the tide know
what those footprints had to say
the sand kept those secrets
till they wore away
like sea shells
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Hi raj
No chopped prose here!. In my opinion a most excellent free verse with good use of metaphor.......stan
Thanks Stan for your time,
Thanks Stan for your time, visit and comment..
Regards,
you are raj
just
A S T O U N D I N G
"little did the tide know
"little did the tide know
what those footprints had to say
the sand kept those secrets
till they wore away
like sea shells"
Raj, this is specially awesome!!
PS. Is Lovestruck one word?
Thanks Rula for the time,
Thanks Rula for the time, visit, read and comment. Good to know you liked the second portion of verses...
Not sure if it should be Lovestruck or Love Struck or any other title..
Regards,
The title
can be anything you feel the poem conveys.
Rula, I am still thinking
Rula, I am still thinking about a change in the title.
Regards,
little did I know
I was going to come across this
What beautiful freeverse I feel privelaged to read poetry this good and be lucky enough to be able to discuss it with the poet ..
This is profoundly good my friend .. such a pleasure to read ... sigh
Love Jayne x
Hi Jayne
thanks for the read and your comment which will inspire me to write better...
Take good care..be well..
Much love and warm hugs...