Meshing Haiku

River rises swift

In cold spring morning

Wet snow melting as it falls

The north wind penetrating

Pushing sheets of rain

Over mountain pass

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Meshing Haiku is one that is structured 5-7-5-7-5 and the left and right side can stand alone as individual haiku but work well as a whole

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Diego, California U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespear

Comments

Buddha

Its a beautiful poetry but its not haiku since haiku has only 3 lines and follow the format of 5/7/5 syllable counts.. Even if you meshed it up a haiku still has only 3 lines.lol.

Alid

Greetings,

and Welcome to Neopoet.

I enjoyed this poem, and I learned a new form, 'meshing haiku"!

I can find no fault; you imagery is great, you have stayed with the form, and it all comes together well.

Good poetry.

Thank you for your review and

Thank you for your review and encouraging words.

awesome

sheets of rain..
been awhile since I heard that
and in a poem
even better!!!
better was I remember seeing
it..working in it and just
having too be in it

thank U