VOL DE NUIT rewritten

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VOL DE NUIT

sudden silences, different paths,
forsaken friendships of the past,
parallel lines intersecting
for a while,
feeding lies , faking words
faking smiles
abrupt endings
night flight to tangential lives
as we live so we die
alone
no one left to cry

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: USA

Comments

I feel you did not finish your last words.

They are as important as the poetry itself as it shines light on who you are.
The poem is poignant.

thanks./I will work on it.

jor

Usually...

I ask a poet, if they might find a way, to shorten the lines, but in this case, I kind of agree with Wes.
I'd like to see a more elegant, descriptive wording. I see the finality and the end of the poem. ~ Gee