Anticipation

Secretly
I lay
A pink Hibiscus
In my lovers bath
My heart races
With delightful
Anticipation

About This Poem

Last Few Words: This poem actually is a true snapshot of my wedding night, my wife was undressing and I poured her a bubble bath. The hibiscus and bubble bath I had pre planned... It worked as planned

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Diego, California U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Shakespear

Comments

Bud

Seems like romance is still alive in remote corners of the globe, a good small write Welcome to out site and I hope to see many more writes and your interaction with many of us, Yours Ian.T

Thank you Bud for your

Thank you Bud for your critique, I look forward to writing more and learning more form reading other poets work. Thank you so much. Buddha...

Nice

Love the whimsical way you wrote this lovely Imitate piece

Thank you so very much

Thank you so very much Barbara for your critique. I love to write Haiku and will start again soon. Buddha...

Great

Stop by my workshop collaborative poetry writing (renga) anytime and share your haiku.

for a moment I thought

Buddha had returned
as if he were still unmarried
trying to make amends
to his lovely wife

I loved your critique Lovedly

I loved your critique Lovedly, My wife inspires everything I do including writing poetry. Buddha

great

hope u will stay

Bro

Good one. Keep on writing!

Alid

I wish more husbands would

I wish more husbands would pen emotions. Lovely

Thank you for your comment. I

Thank you for your comment. I really appreciate your response. Some men have trouble with emotions, I grew up with a father who did not encourage or tollerate emotions from anyone in the family. My wife helped me through that and I am still learning.