vandiemenspeak
vandiemenspeak
Nov 22, 2015

Singing the ennui away.

Trundle up the hill in grief,
then thunder down,hot tears in rain

Wedge your nose into a rose,
as if to learn to sniff again

Find your feet, raise up and plod
on the self same, old beaten track

Peer in lost curiosity at shops, once known,
interiors now, are starkly black

Realize, you've done all this before
and wonder also, too

Why all the horror of the world
has been lost on some, but loosed on you

But know: this is just the ennui talking
that late afternoon palliative rose

That covets all our shouldered burdens
convinces us we're carved morose

When will all this vicious circling,
totem of the life we call absurd

Be broken and the heart thrown open -
hearing songs, as yet unheard?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: France, notre cœur est avec vous.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tasmania,Australia,Earth,Solar Systems,Milky way,Pint of Guniess, AUS

Favorite Poets: Glen Richards

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Comments

wesley snow

Loose, but obvious structure. Almost a western structured free verse.
I liked it very much.

S

I suspect you are already aware that line 7 needs a bit of trimming. Maybe :peer through shop glazes once familiar? Enjoyed the read nonetheless........stan

vandiemenspeak

Well spotted, was just testing you ;) - line is thus tweaked, and another minor change. busy time of the year, haven't been around much, hope all is well.

Cheers.

Chris.