raj

Oct 07, 2015

Frosted Glass

While liquid emotions thicken into chilly icicles
imprisoned within a brittle psyche
the longing draws your warmth
caressing a promise
of thy lips sipping my nectar

in that overwhelming moment
enveloped by your cozy warmth
tears roll down to greet you
drenching my cheeks
your touch turns them
into dew

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Somewhere in the world, IND

Comments

Thanks Joe for your time read

Thanks Joe for your time read and encouraging words.

Regards,

Thanks Wesley for your time,

Thanks Wesley for your time, read and comment.

Regards,

Thanks Alid for your time,

Thanks Alid for your time, read and comment.

Regards,

raj

A vision of beauty and so well written, no need to say more,
Yours as always, Ian..

Thanks Ian for your time,

Thanks Ian for your time, read and appreciative comment.

Regards,

hip hip hurray

what else can loved say ?
just the nectar of dew
due from you

Thanks Lovedly for your time

Thanks Lovedly for your time and appreciative cheers.

Regards,

hahahhaa

back and glad to c u sublime
coming out of oceans lime
ok
underscore
ocean _lime

Wow!

What a lively capture raj!

Just wondering why have you used "turning" instead "turns" or "turned"

Thanks Rula for your appreciative exclamation. As for the use of the word "turning" it was because the poem runs in present tense. I agree turns could still be used. Why do you think "turning" is not an appropriate usage?

Between this poem and Lovestruck could be a result of an infection of :"hiding emotions in metaphors" work shops which I used to peekaboo into from time to time as a learning experience...lol..

Regards,

Hello raj

by sense I thought you need a verb here while "turning" as used here a gerund and is a noun.

Ok. Will change to "turns"

Thanks Rula for taking time to suggest changes. Much appreciated

Frosted Glass

About This Poem

About the Author

Comments

Bravo !!!!

Thanks Joe for your time read

What Geremia said.

Thanks Wesley for your time,

Sublime, raj

Thanks Alid for your time,

raj

Thanks Ian for your time,

hip hip hurray

Thanks Lovedly for your time

hahahhaa

Wow!

Thanks Rula for your

Hello raj

Ok. Will change to "turns"