lovedly
lovedly
Oct 04, 2015

Modern sexism (Kind suggestions from Rula)

Love is not blind
she asked me

Guys can see the ways
gals show as always,
and
then the path is clear...
when the guys have had their fun
they simply run.

only then, gals come to know
who was
and
who wasn't blind
he, love or she...

So gals your ways mind
I have seen so many come here
to have one night only
of such a kind

most guys can only see
one thing
‘’’whole’
always and anywhere
at all times

Around the world I have seen
gals are opening their eyes
and
so guys are now going blind
well in another guy’s
‘gay-‘ship’
openly find

Gals also since many years
have not been left behind
they too don't mind
as another gal’s love
they also happen to find

'Tis modern generation of today
which if at all
is blind
don’t you guys and gals that mind
Love is forever kind
Gayism- lesbianism
today many modern youth
have in mind

Love is not blind...
gayism ala lesbianism maybe is

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

weirdelf

you are consistent in your extreme inconsistency. Low prosodic values and fairly abhorrent misogyny. I could pick it to bits for it's falsehoods and self-contradictions but it is not worth the effort.

I hope someone else reads it and finds some value in it. Perhaps I am just cranky and tired.

Rula

Rula

9 years 6 months ago

I feel some contradiction in your words here. Regardless of the way you're handling the theme here, I thought it is an eye opener for both of the gls. and the boys nowadays.
I don't have any suggestions to improve but I thought this piece in particular can make a good benefit from punctuation. The reader needs some kind of guidance here.
Just my thoughts. The decision is yours.