HIDE
Emeralds, rubies, and diamonds
black veils of sweet perfume
eyes blinded by sun's reflection
on waters blue
all things shiny and new
monsters and demons smiling
through the masks of imagination
bright jewels of sublimation
HIDE
Emeralds, rubies, and diamonds
black veils of sweet perfume
eyes blinded by sun's reflection
on waters blue
all things shiny and new
monsters and demons smiling
through the masks of imagination
bright jewels of sublimation
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Haven't been here in a while...
have I? Scribbler barked about us not reading and critiquing as much as we should and I am the worst offender. I get so wrapped up with the workshop program I forget the purpose of the site.
To communicate.
Your writing is always rather esoteric, but usually I follow gently along. This one kind of went over my head. The imagery of stones to water was lovely, but I missed the poem.
Remember though, when a poem is being read it is not the poet being judged, but the reader.
Look behind the rhyme and
Look behind the rhyme and metaphor ; let the mask drop and one will see the truth of emotions hidden behind, No matter how I write, I can never tell or pretend what are the truths of my ""journey.""
excellent .....a wave... nay
a surf of difference
from death demons
to life and diamonds
well done
the Lord's kindness
as you approach
your life's
ordained assignment
You understand,
You understand,
You understand,
You understand,
but of course
and tis for ur good