your last breath
shes gone
what the fuck
how do you know
nurses they know everything
even if they are your sisters
dad layed on top of you
crying
dont leave me
but you did
peacefully
beautifully
and now the emptiness
of having no mom
swallows me down
into a batter of despair
Jul 02, 2015
mom
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hello
welcome back. I think this displays well the anguish of losing one's mother. But it's almost impossible to really describe the event even if you've been through it............stan
Thank you, I appreciate you
Thank you, I appreciate you reading it.
Moianna
Your second piece in so many years, these losses are usually portrayed in the withdrawal of all thoughts as if it never happened, but we know that it is the way after the wailing stops, it is a time never forgotten and we all have to attend.
Your first poem two years ago received three good reviews but you didn't answer.
I hope you are going to join in with us here in reviews and replies.
Look forward to more of your first piece type of writing,
Take care, Yours Ian
Thank you. I lost some poems
Thank you. I lost some poems on this site when things changed. I am not sure how to find them.
I come here to release some pain and then do not return. I will be more responsive to peoples comments.