An Exploration of Style, Subject, and Critique

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Lamp (An Exploration of Style- Haiku)

In the far distance
a light leads me to meaning
I follow or not

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Sydney, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: The Romantics

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Comments

Jess

A Haiku perfectly executed and the questions it brings up are relevant to the original Japanese writing form.
Yours with nothing more to say,
Ian
NB:- My comments or crit are to keep your workshop entries at the top of the stream.
But relevant to their structure..

ta

mate

a haiku from the master

Great one Jess
Perfect cutting line - you make it seem so simple...
Love judy
xxx

I know why I never wrote a novel

and instead mastered the shortest forms, haiku and limerick. It is because I am a coward and a control freak. I'm afraid of exposing my dark side. Neopoets think they've seen it? Not half.

The good

thing about Haiku is they leave little volume in which to make mistakes. The "syllable" count is either right or it isn't and the message is either there or not. But in this one even the mood is Eastern........stan

ta

though it is not truly haiku or senryu by content.

Content rules for haiku have morphed

I like this. It flows and feels right.

The rules for haiku have morphed to a degree that, in some cases, even syllable count/sound units are being ignored.

But this hearkens back to the intent of a haiku, in my mind.