Paint me red
I paint a light
when tis darkness and others can't see
Fluorescence paint is needed for me
to ensure they can see
my silhouette
out in the darkness
a vision of the only one
of a kind of me
your own take friend
that's me.....
now there is no more glee
no light for me
this is what I in your poetry see
won’t call it blasphemy
as distance alone
lends beauty to a scene
we have once good friends been...
haven’t we?
Comments
A srong and meaningful pathos.
One of your gems. No whining for attention, an exemplar of alienation.
In short,
a gem.
thanks Jess
u say I am no poet---------------------------------
some ones gave me a
BRONZE
for this.... u also call a gem thanks
i write once in a while
as earthquakes aren't too often
regards
medicine and meditation are ur panacea j\friend
gem = poet
I can't apologise enough.
thanks Jess
bows...................
There is creativity
and I like the idea of "Fluorescence paint"
You shine beloved without the flurenscene paint. You do with your unique style.
welcome back.
thanks Rula 4 ur lovely inspiring words
they gave me a
BRONZE
for this in some competition
stay blessed
nice one loved
love judy
xxx
Great write, I agree fully with the other crtiques
Great write. I fully agree with the other critiques.
be well,
joe
no waffle no!
Glad you liked it Judy
writing without cacophony...
this is natural, i loved the way it was composed
grand of u to say so
kindness again
two poems u glanced today
come again my way