Sweet dreams
Sweet dreams are written in heaven
for those who are happily married
those still distraught
are in fallacious search caught
searching wild in the wilderness
all day all night
so let the wavering winds blow
and as we from here all go
late into the eerie night
day break bring violet light
let red roses spray fragrance too
of love and affection on all of you
like rainbows true
with a smiling hue
Comments
lol
Nice loved
But 'winds of change' --- too cliche
Can you think of a unique way to say it?
Love judy
xxx
flapping winds may be
what do you think Judie
glad you now laugh at me
rflol hahaha!
hello
Not all marriages bear sweet dreams lol. But I' damned lucky that mine has given me few night mares. Might try let the storms of pruning blow if you want to say that line differently.........stan
squint eyed
Might try let the storms of pruning blow if you want to say that line differently.........stan??????
couldn't follow what and why why lie>?
Oh
Judy suggested a change for winds of change. That's the line I referred to
what would you like it to be as winds keep changing here at
mighty speed
''' let the winds race with speed ''
may be? just see
so let the winds of change
so let the winds of change blow
and as we from here all go
'''so let the winds race with speed
and with it slice away human greed...''
any better is it
late into the night etc....
Loved
I recently gave you a complete list of winds,
any of these will do,
but pick one that in your area doth blow..
So let the Zephyr of life flow.
Come on we wrote of many for you to choose lol,
Take care young Bard and don't get the Wind/Wind up just you do your own thing,
Yours Ian..
i get ur hint
i will let my wind flutter
as it does still
i won't my waffle kill
winds blow
we all know
gone be the wind
along with the bard
with in
i get ur hint
i will let my wind flutter
as it does still
i won't my waffle kill
winds blow
we all know
gone be the wind
along with the bard
with in
Lovedly
good one...i suggest you keep the two line pattern through and through instead of 1 sanza which is of 3 verses...
choose an alternate to "fumes" because fumes conveys pollution rather than fragrance, scent, aroma...
A good read,
Regards,
thanks
raj _sublime
for u being so
gen... you... ine
i have
condensed it
Lovedly
to me it looks nicely condensed now
Regards,
thank you so much ...Raj _ sublime _mumbai@ jahoo***..kom
the ocean Indian
lovely loved
Great revisions
xxx
Thanks Judie
all your good wishes