I close my eyes and hear it beckon me
recumbent countryside of being’s realm
a voice that whispers, come, be city free
with such desire, my heart is overwhelmed
to leave the dank and dirty urban street
its people tired, too busy much to care
to find a place with friendly souls to meet
and taste and feel and smell the rural air
see animated murals as they form
feel ever-changing landscapes, as they push
intensely fragrant pure ambrosial storm
from multispectral flowers of the bush
watch setting summer suns that throw their light
all over wheat-filled oceans made of gold
that wave so gently, right to left, then right
a perfect shot for nature’s centrefold
and while the damp of twilight quells the fuse
enjoy horizon’s ever moving show
as, slowly, all the changing, softening hues
diminish down to just a fiery glow
with perfect background, iridescent tints
so paint the vista, using rainbow beams
as sinking heat reflects, it simply glints
then slowly fades to grey. Apollo dreams
while clutching Lady Night’s black velvet cloak
the panorama deepens, darkness creeps
and shades of starlit shadow now invoke
a sweet surrender yield, as nature sleeps
then sight will turn to crowds of twinkling gems
within a jewelled, giant serpent’s arc
that soars above, in heaven’s diadems
each bauble sending out a flawless spark
to know suburban’s neon, then the glen’s
it’s obvious, address it with a sigh -
one can’t but help compare His work to Men’s
then stare in silent wonder at the sky
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Comments
Of course you know this sort of thing is why I'm your fan.
How could I possibly critique such a thing?
I can only adore it.
thank you Wes
for the very kind words
**** blushing again ****
You'll give me a swelled head if you keep this up :)
Love judy
xxx
Hi Judy
Good example of combining urban with traditional pastoral. Only complaint is the title......snicker lol....stan
lol yes very funny Stan
But I don't care, as it saved me thinking up a title :)
But now, on second thoughts, I maybe could've done something with the cat theme - I think I'll work on it - would that make you happy?
Love judy
xxx
So you're gonna write "pastoral poem number two"? lol
just kidding around. I like #1 just fine
Judyanne
Query: does this form [pastoral] demand the abab rhyme sequence?
Regards,
no Raj
'Pastoral' refers to the genre
Check it out in the dictionary
It is an old form - romanticising nature, the rural life and God
Of course, in the 'old days' it was written in form, as we hadn't invented free form or met the Japanese back then ....
These days it can be any form
It is simply supposed to give the reader an 'all is right with the world' feeling,
xxx
Judyanne
thanks as always for your inputs...
Regards,
Pssst.
Don't tell her I'm saying it again, but I think she's incredibly useful as well.
Raj, why haven't you signed up for the Meter Workshop? It's to be held in the Wading Pool and deal with basic meter. I think it might answer some questions for you.