Alike the nightingale my words would rhyme,
beguile the heart, induce and charm the ear.
Enchanting rhymes, a nightingale would chime,
shall you to them, one day, those words endear?
Alike the nightingale my words upsoar;
inspire poets, stir, evoke the feels.
My words alike the nightingale abhor
the foul play that man for long now reels.
Yet like a night in gale my words are raped.
Unlike the mighty swords, they oddly rust.
Enchained in ignorance they now are scraped,
the pages calm, the words have lost their gust.
The mighty words, once cut alike the swords,
become the nightingale's but broken cords.
Comments
Salam, Rula
does this type of sonnet needs perfect rhyme too? I thought you need the same syllable count for that. If so, then "ear" and "endear" in the 1st stanza won't be right.
Alid
I disagree.
Listen carefully.
Each rhyming sound has a preceding sound. It need not be part of one of the words. In this case "ear" is preceded by "the" and "dear" by "en". Words need not be of the same syllable count within the word itself. The word preceding gives the metrical stress or unstress. The only thing we are concerned with is that the like vowel sounds in our rhyme are preceded by unlike consonant sounds. Note I said "sound". Spelling is irrelevant. Only sound counts.
Does this make sense?
Salam Khalid
so I expect from you a perfect Elizabethan sonnet :)
lol
Oh no you don't. NOT in my current state. I'm just quoting our judy. You can expect it from HER, I'm still very much a novice.
Alid
just a couple of things rula
the FOUL | PLAY that | MAN for | LONG now | REELS
raped / encaged does not rhyme
Ear / endear are not perfect rhyme
A beautiful sonnet
I love the opening two verses
And a great finishing couplet
Love judy
xxx
Not if it is FO-ul
the FO | ul PLAY | that MAN | for LONG | now REELS
foul
is only one syllable rula
http://i.word.com/idictionary
http://i.word.com/idictionary/foul
i just followed your link
As far as I can see, it doesn't say it is two syllables
In general speech one never says FO-ul
.
there is an optional shwa
foul
adjective \ˈfau̇(-ə)l\
: very unpleasant to taste or smell
: morally bad : very evil
: very bad or unpleasant
I think it is not so clear for the native speaker :)
just me maybe
but I think it, as with the 'beaut' in your 'As May Passed By', will be read by most as one syllable, thus sounding out in rhythm
Love judy
xxx
I pronounce "foul"
in on syllable, but I know that at least some British dialects say "fo-ul".
Even dictionaries transcribe it
differently. I think it depends on the publisher's nationality.
nice edit - rhymes well
But doesn't seem to do it justice
Can i suggest
Enchained in ignorance they're badly shaped .?.?
Just a thought :)
love judy
xxx
doesn't do it justice
you mean doesn't fit for the verse's meaning ? I know it means something like "scratched"