IKnowNoBox
Jan 17, 2015

Her Deepest Tremor

aroused at her core

molten pressure triggered

optimal pressure increases

steam escape velocity extreme

plate structure agitation

fissure motion

set to…-_

– - shift jarrr!!!!!

roll-symphonic jack hammers

jolt- /sway… not-rock-ab’a

rock a-city– -seismic s- — - hu - d

d-e - – er - -

Calm to discombobulate’/disor’der

re secure civil structure…

until she shakes again

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: East Coast, USA

Favorite Poets: Weird Elf

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Comments

Seren

Seren

10 years 3 months ago

Phew, that was a quickie ! but it worked lol, I have to say it was a little too soon to finish I think it could have been drawn out a little more but that's just me being greedy again I suspect, Sorry but I have to run I have a plane to meet in a few hours and I need to get sorted to drive and pick them up, I will say very well done hun I did enjoy the read short though it was lol giggle

love Jayne x

wesley snow

but I had a little trouble seeing the poem in the odd language. It may just be me.
I often say that when a poem is being read it is not the poet who is being judged, but rather the reader.