Let me tell you 'bout Mr. Face,
who dwells in the luxurious space.
He hasn't an eye, an ear, nor hair,
and lives though never breathed the air.
He's good friends in a very huge amount,
these are so many than any could count.
Because friendship is all that he'd care,
he'd travel to almost everywhere.
He lives on the thoughts yet he's anencephalic,
and always known for being abibliphobic.
along with him everyone would surf,
and yet he would never lose a nerve.
No it's not the face book I'm talking 'bout,
though I hear you say it, and shout it out.
Mrs. Face lives without a care
As with him she said her life she’d share.
A love that binds all thoughts twix the two
One motion not visible to me or you.
There is no way that anyone can view
The love that flowed between the two
A thought that came and was transferred
See not a word spoken quite absurd
But they will live forever more
Made for each other that’s for sure
In the thoughts of love they exist today
I wish I could love and be that way.
I hear a voice now who is thinking so
It’s their faces from that time long ago
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Comments
Rula and Ian
I must say both of you are raising the bar for others with this write which is brilliant and unique in many ways, such as:-
1. The mystery element besides humor which held me captive, almost scratching my head all through the read.
2.Liked the way you repeated the word "almost" in lone 4 of stanza 2 to establi8sh a good cadence.
3. It is amazing that two of you struck a good wavelength so quickly to come up with the write which if you would not have mentioned wouldn't have been noticed as two pieces written separately by 2 individual who are miles apart physically
4. Use of some of the words which i would need to search for their meanings in dictionary. e.g. anencephalic (could be related to brain), abibliphobi (must be some kind of fear)
5. Tell you what after all this, I am still not sure about who Mr. & Mrs. Face are...lol..
Well done guys...
Regards,
raj
Thank you for your read and great comments, we (Rula and I ) just wrote it in two separate pieces which seemed to work well.
Thanks again Yours as always Ian.T
This is a great collaboration
The two of you sound good together and this was very amusing, brought a smile to my face. Your choice of words were excellent and flowed well with the idea of the poem. Great job!
Carrie
Thanks for your comment, I hope Nevermore's Eye is better now, I had to guess at the colour so I sent a mood eye, that is primarily Green,
Take care young Lady, Yours Ian x
you did get this very smooth
for the fact that this is written by 2 people who live thousands of miles apart... well done
Can i take a guess? ..... did rula write the 1st part, and ian the 2nd?
You matched your styles well....
i too am left wondering about mr and mrs face lol - the mind boggles
love judy
xxx
I am
going to guess and say Mr. and Mrs. Face have something to do with Facebook and the many identities on there :)
Raj, Carrie, Judyanne,
Raj, Carrie, Judyanne,
I am happy to know you think this is smooth and works well for the Workshop. I believe you all know that dear Ian is talented enough to cope up with any poet. He amazed me too when I read his part, though I shouldn't.
Ian it was a real honour to have you my partner in this workshop and thanks for bearing with me till I got my part ready.
Thank you everyone.
Rula
It was a pleasure working with you, and this piece made them think, I could feel the heat of global warming lol.
Thanks again,
Yours as always Ian x
Would be
interesting to see you guys collaborate on another project again. Perhaps someone could do a Collaborative WS at some point. Just throwing an idea out there. It is a lot of fun working as a team.
Dearest Rula and Ian
Sorry for my intrusion on the workshop but I had to read this one the title caught my eye and my interest, I really loved the whole poem but the first verse felt a little forced and I feel that its a little over punctuated, they are the only things I could suggest its a really wonderfully put together poem, well done to you both.
much love Jayne x
Jayne
Thank you for your visit in what must be a tryng time for you.
We all hope that the healing you have within yourself and the healing sent to you with Unconditional love gets you back to us soon, know we are there with you each day, Yours as always Ian, and The Children xx
thanks Jayne
Thank you for the visit. I wonder though what do you mean by the first verse. Verse usually refers to line, or do you mean the whole first part ( written by me)?
Hey Rula
When I say verse or a stanza that means it is a grouped set of lines within a poem so its the first four lines I am talking about not the whole of the part you wrote Rula, the rhyme felt forced BUT in saying that it maybe just me wait and see what the others think I maybe way off I haven't been around for a long time I am a little rusty hun lol
love Jayne x
so
you wanted the first stanza dear. This what I thought. I considered your suggestion, however the punctuation is how I thought it should be.
Thank you dear.
Very successful.
"Anencephalic" means an individual with part or all of their brain missing.
I don't however, know what abibliphobic means.
Rula?
thank you sir
Abibliphobia is the fear of running out of the reading material.
It is one of the 100 funniest words in English according to the alpha dictionary
http://www.alphadictionary.com/articles/100_funniest_words.html
I wonder though
What's funny about such long words. I always thought short words with certain sounds are funnier, but no one mentioned this in the workshop.
May be someone can answer me!
What makes one word funnier than another and how would a non native know it?
For example, I read that destroy is routine word but pulverize is hilarious. Yellow is conventional but chartreuse is witty. Surprise is ordinary but flabbergasted is priceless.
So, can this be clarified?
just imo
Words, per se, are not particularly funny nor not funny
The humour totally depends on the context in which they are used
Love judy
xxx
this is
What I thought too.
The word you're looking for is Euphonius.
The categorizing of words as either ugly or beautiful. Funny, sad, frightening... all words offer a certain feeling in their context. Euphonius ignores context and concentrates entirely on the sound the word creates. Onomatopeia means a word that represents a sound in nature... such as "boom" or "bark". It is also a "funny" sounding word.
You are right that some words have a context that means a different thing thananother word with the same meaning... such as "destroy" and "pulverize". Destroy is dramatic as if we are doing a real harm and leaving something in a broken state. Pulverize is closer akin to what a football team does to another. No real harm, but damage is done.
By the way, I don't think "pulverize" is funny, but I see your point and your other examples are good as well.
To use funny words, trust your instincts. They are sound.
Nice work
I read it but must come back later to give the critique
Way serious
Front part of brain functioning properly, but back part of brain u developed. Wow
"He lives on the thoughts yet he's anencephalic,
and always known for being abibliphobic." I have no idea what this word is
These two lines has me thinking serious thoughts.
Not very funny but, certainly educational. Lol