roses

smell the roses on the way
a saying often used
to encourage awareness of the day

amiable, perfumed petals
the aroma of harmony
the joys of living
captured within....
the bloom forever true

unfailing redolent bouquet
steadfastly soothing
... one can forget
lurking out of sight
there are prickles

and some seasons
the barb jags the finger

for each chance we take
a lesson is learned
while both flower and thorn
share the telling

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many

Comments

Elegant and understated.

I would not have thought it possible to bring a fresh sense to a poem about roses, well done.

thanks so much jess

I was unsure of this .... my muses are still sulking .... so I'm really happy you think that i achieved at least one aim of the poet.....
love judy
xxx

Hiya Judy

Good job of conveying that smelling the roses can often come with a price. Stanza 3 line 2 might read a bit better if started with either "an" or "the". I enjoyed reading this......stan

many thanks stan

For your input on this.... it made me rethink it and i think it's better..... do you ? Would love to know
I don't use .....s that much, but i think they have their place

I didn't want too many and's or the's.... and i had a win ... because you made me think, i got rid of a that :)

Love judy
xxx

each moment is a bliss
they all send flying kiss
gals and guys doesn't matter
its all coz
i am loved and lovedly
there some one
wantedly
neopoets be happy
you produced a one like me