true lovers with style and class
don’t need to be kicked up the arse
they tangle sometimes
and they share all their crimes
so the rings will be silver not brass
Dec 31, 2014
Sam + Emma
About This Poem
Last Few Words: for my Cousins wedding
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
cool enough, but
cool enough, but grammatically, I think "there" should be "their"
I could be wrong thuouwgh ass I gess at this kinds a stuf all times: I don't know stufff good
so double checker me: better you do
I'm an idiot sometimes!
you are
. . . right on the money
I thank you :)
Fun write
Hi Simon,
Not been on here in ages and you're a newbie as far as I'm concerned. Liked the write and was thinking it could be applied to my daughter Rachel & Will who have just moved in together after graduating Uni...young lovers....poor kids, just starting out on their journeys.
Ellie
at your service
feel free to use it if you like
silver..
brass were tools and keys.a softer more heavier constitute
well mixed for alloys
silver was and is still a commercial trade good
even rings....my sterling at the pawn and hock
brings me cash and luck
a short and lively poem
Thank You!
yes
I was hoping the leap could be made from brass ring at brass knuckles.
sterling may be worth less to some but I like it more than gold.
thanks for the kindness
Loved the limerick.
.
nor hardened steel bracelets
You certainly have a dab hand to the limerick, young man.
It can be so powerful when used a droit ou au sinistere ou jolie.