Ian.T
Ian.T
Nov 15, 2014
This poem is part of the workshop:

Can you make a limerick serious?

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Ouch (This is serious Limericks)

With knee on my chest
The dentist knew best
Tooth gave way
Dentist flew away
They say he has gone west

La La

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Ouch again!

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Leicestershire, Ex Moonraker, GBR

Favorite Poets: All those I meet or read about in my books

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R

raj

10 years 5 months ago

Good Limerick. Not sure though if it can be classified as serious limerick...even you went La La ..lol

Regards

Ian.T

Thanks for the visit and good comment, I was bored and needed to write something.
Must get Barbara's New WS going, they are as much fun as this one.
Take care, Yours Ian.T

lovedly

A seriously funny, sweet limy
the dentist must be a trainee
not knowing you are old
teeth will now fly as gold
did she expect them to be brainy

Ian.T

Not funny still have the knee marks on my chest lol, only 12 teeth to go then I shall buy some new ones,
Thanks for dropping in, Yours Ian.T

lovedly

they all say thirty two teeth we possess
they also say thirty at the most we confess
who eats the other two
well no dentist ever knew
actually dentistry can only teach not profess

Ian.T

I was a little bored and jotted this one down, they are becoming a habit, so I will have to find something good to write, but what would others like???
Thanks for your visit, Yours Ian.T

L

Funny !!!

This happened to me in the late 90's when a dentist had his knee on my chest for 45 minutes trying to extricate my tooth! Never came out and had to g to the dental hospital !!! May try my hand at a limerick Ian !!!

Liked this a lot!

Ian.T

Thanks for your visit, you will have to hurry if you want an unwashed "T" shirt of Jesses, not sure how long this is going on for, it becomes a habit and a lot of fun how to be serious when laughing, Yours Ian.T

weirdelf

nor good limerick form.

Read some more classic limericks and let the form sing in your mind.