There in my way was a wooded glade
From virulent green to autumns shade
It arrived this morning as if newly grown
The trees many colours felt for me alone
The sky above a beautiful azure blue
What more crossed my path anew?
The afterlife was having a good laugh
A chuckle came infesting my new path
"We hear you within your troubled ways
You left the path of life for many days.
We have made a sanctuary for you to find
Where you can regain your peace of mind."
“Walk within our shade and be at peace,
“Here you can fathom what gives you grief”
A thousand things just crossed my mind,
They became sorted, rubbish left behind.
I felt much lighter as I walked around
I even noticed the flowers, and bird sounds
"The air seems clearer as I walked with you
My heavy load gone, so nothing was true?"
My thoughts brought tears to each day,
They couldn’t see how to be happy and play.
Why did those feelings from all of you
Festoon my heart with a weights untrue.
The children that helped me, said they knew,
Now I am free of not only me, but of you
They held me, letting all the badness fly,
No reason anymore, to just sit and cry.
"Thank you children" I thought on turning for home
Their laughter and love held me when alone,
Why couldn’t I see this simple way before?
They laughed again, with me, as I opened the door.
Saying” You think too much”
NB:- No trees were hurt in this peace J.S
Comments
which new workshop?
word one
in that epicurials r not allowed
you will take away all Stan's invaluable time
we all will feel neglected
Ian
Loved
The start has been delayed a week or so, you have to read Stan's layout for a contest and now with the delay you have more time to prepare lol.
Yours Ian.
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Hi guys
I think this is for the contest thing, not the upcoming workshop. If that's so I'd appreciate your editing the title Ian to say for contest. As is it's causing a bit of confusion..........stan
Stan
Yep it's for the contest type stream you were talking about so I have changed the title.
Thanks for putting me right on that one,
Yours Ian
This is awsome
Ian with your usual way of talking about the beauty of the things especially the spirits of the children. I like how you've worded the whole thing. Some might thing the rhyme scheme is a bit singy songy but I like it as it rings almost like a lyric.
Good luck.
Rula
Thank you yes I know it sounds a little songy but it is trying to be a lullaby to quell the stress we have sometimes, and I think you picked it up when reading.
Thanks for your visit, Yours Ian.x
Ian
I agree with Rula. This is an awesome write and matches the criteria i think set by Stan for the contest. the only line I feel you may want to tweak is
I had in my way brought tears to each day.
I think you are a strong contender for winning the contest.
Regards,
raj
This was a rough write , I have tweaked a few words here and there I hope it reads better now.
I am so sorry that I am at this moment unable to bring across the true feelings that they give me each day,
Yours Ian.T