*A little girl next door
went to the store
to get some candy
she saw a fat black cat in her path,
ran screaming out the door and in the grass boys laughed and rolled.*
Nov 02, 2014
The Fat Black Cat Limerick WS
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Getting there, Barbara
there is poignancy but the meter is really quite out. Do read some classic limericks out loud too get the feel of the comic musicality of the form.
This does not "sound" like a limerick
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/the-fat-black-cat-limerick-by
Jess
I heard the difference
Jess
I've listened to your limericks on the soundcloud. How is this?
last line still to long,
but it is a very good poem.
Jess
I thought long was okay?
read these aloud!
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks
I'm sick of saying it.
It's not AABBA, it is lyrics
read them aloud.
https://soundcloud.com/user536630132/examples-of-limericks