Obsession

What is this obsession
with which I feel so strong?
Heart-thump! Soul-fly! Mind’s eye!
Spirits thriving more for!

Sugared coffee mixture,
Icing cream to being.
Musical poetry?
Can not get rid of you!

So in this bliss, one cannot miss
obsession in my possession.
Thus must entrust, just lust encrust!
See I decree, be in with me!
Beginning now, my own future.

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Calgary, Alberta

Favorite Poets: Maya Angelou

Comments

lyricism extraordinaire..................... !!!!

i love your poems your rhymes are very brilliant and much appreciated. very good exposition

This i like,

This i like,just one change i'd make and that is line 4 verse 2, I'd try (can not rid myself of you), or (can't get rid of you) Hope this is of help. Regards Roscoe...