lovedly
lovedly
Sep 08, 2014

sorry and retort a re-thought!

Fundamentals of life
are just two
for me and you

first

if you are wrong
simply say

sorry!

but if you are dead sure
you are right

fight!

retort
till things you sort...

remember these two
and be happy

let the Lord take care of after life
in which who still believe

you too
okay do!

take care
not to please!
me
loved...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

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mand

mand

10 years 7 months ago

Lovedly this is the best of yours yet! It's clear, precise, to the point and really good advice!

The only adjustments I would make would be: ( and it is only me )

retort till things are sorted......

let the Lord take care of "the" after life.

of course it's up to you! either way this is the best!

LOve Mand xxxx