I've caused much discomfort
in the lives of many
death and pestilence
always leave me behind
annoying or tedious persons
take liberties with my sensations
even those doing great things for others
willingly take me upon themselves
sometimes people will take me on
just to say what they must
then there are those putting forth
effort for the good
getting me in return
I'm often used as a slogan in fitness centers
proscribed in penalties for
disobedience and shortcomings
I am pain.
Comments
Hi Barbara
This poem is of a high standard - well thought out and so true!
wouldn't this be good for WS dramatic verse - a soliloquy? or does it have to be an actual person speaking?
Very well done Barbara :)
Love Mand xxxx
Mand
Thanks when I get something I get it well. Lol. It would be bc I based on the workshop. I didn't know it Wes want me posting more than one to the WS. Bc I will run out of control when I learn something new like storytelling dramatic verse.
No it don't halve to be a actual person bc Stan soliloquy is about death. It how I came up with a soliloquy for pain.
Thanks for reading.
Hey Barbara,
Great topic with good, honest, imagery that makes the poem all that much better! You've done yourself proud with this one!
Thanks Lonnie
Been a minute since I heard from you. Stan inspired this write when he wrote "In Shadows" hehe
Thanks Lonnie
Been a minute since I heard from you. Stan inspired this write when he wrote "In Shadows" hehe
The only reason you might not want to post more
is to keep from pushing others out. I don't mind. I'm glad you've caught on to something you like. That was the chief purpose of the workshop and I hope this experiment influences all of your poetry.
This a better monologue than your others because the character is so clearly defined. Even (like Stan's) if we don't know the identity of the speaker until the end, we nevertheless know its personality.
Yes yes
I thinking hard about my real play I almost came up with the character. But need more help reading other th get it figured out. You said find character first I meditating hard on that. The write story?
I want be posting more except for final play
I've a few characters I werestling with. Haven't made a decisions as to which to write from scratch.
Take your time Barbara.
We have lots of it.
Wes
Okay I was feeling a bit rush. I'm working on one where Im Adam voice, there's Eve voice and god voice. The subject is not intended to cause controversy.. It simply a scriptural play.
Barbara
The comments made by others are worthy of your effort in coming up with this one. It is indeed good.
Regards,
Raj
Thanks raj, I was up to 3am writing it. My brain wouldn't quit till it was done. I'm rested and is feeling a lot better. But is still under the weather right now.