lovedly

Sep 05, 2014

This poem is part of the workshop:

Storytelling in Verse: Dramatic Verse.

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is this dramatic

too much goes above my silly head

oh my dear why are you so silly

coz I understand fuck all of what here goes on

ah I see the nuances of dramatic and dramatic take it as a
a verb or adjective as snowman says it

yeah yeah you got it

you said you were silly

yes but did you mean I said it

of course not Mr silly twas for here

who are willy nilly?

hahahaa who is silly

not you, you are willy nilly

well now shut up all will come to know who is

what my dear

silly!

Will this do Mr,

Say Sir !

Snow in the man ?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

Comments

At first I was going to whine

that there are two voices in the poem and then I listened a little more carefully. I realized it is one voice talking to itself.
This is very weird, but dramatic verse nonetheless. I would have preferred to see some of the "poetry" I know you are capable of, but this still qualifies as dramatic (noun and adjective) verse.
I'm anxious to hear some of the critiques of this very avant garde piece by the other members of the workshop.
Stan? Ian?

Loved

I would give my thoughts bit my thoughts have been scrambled trying to learn dramatic poetry.

I like this Loved

we do it so often though I am not very fond of the theme, I mean it could have been a bit more serious, but that's only me.
I thought you could have made use of some quotations/ punctuation and the advanced format (Italics/ bold) to show who is saying what.

how does one type bold

and or italics on this site I can't or don't know
SOS please

Ask Jess.

He knows everything.

I hope Jess sees this

he doesn't like PMs

Smeagle

Damn well stop this incessant talking to yourself, though it sort of solves your problems or so you think it does.
I have had a good talk with myself and thought we could join up as a quartet maybe play the bridge hand, but I guess we would be moving around the table too much
So I suggest a game of chess both of us could play you two, we could have such fun talking and arguing with each his own lol.
Loved a grand piece but it is going to be hard for you,
Now the two of us will call on you soon and have an evening of fun.
I could also bring Frank, he says he has a friend that no one likes yet brings joy to his heart on lonely days.
Go well young Bard Have fun,
Talk later,
Yours Ian. T and Sparrow..

from the few odd comments so far received I

Drama poetry for Snowman
From the few odd comments so far received I
have got a hang of it soon I will hang it
what how dare you hang yourself
blasphemy there should be no doubt
you must have two guys, folks speaking

ha, ha you got scared
go hang yourself on the wall of eternity,
no one will come to save thee,
go to Ian if you will, ha ha

he is already knocking at the

‘’Dear Loved may I come in
Out you stranger
Ian never sought any permission,
if you are an imposter,
wait I shall hang you...

well having come so far I can’t retreat
a new dramatic one
I shall dare and no errors will I repeat

Snow Sir is I now on the right track
taking it for granted there is no left,

What say you our dramatic guide?

Shut up man
he is too busy to attend to only you
wait outside in the queue
will you

ha ha this is off the cuff
an appetizer only

ha ha you Sir are really funny
take it from me
this is dramatic no doubt ask
a poet dramatist or reader any,
this will qualify
will say so many.....

Still ask Snow man....