I have a new Japanese poetry Renga workshop idea in the works.
The objective and theme is "bird behavior." "Birds of a Feather" is the title.
The subject is to write a Haiku about the behavior you notice in birds.
Then write a Couplet, as I've done below, to make the poem a Tanka.
The Renga will last a week.. If you would like to be apart of this Renga please feel free to join.
Click the link:http://www.neopoet.com/workshop/workshop-renga-10-birds-feather
Come Renga with the birds. Seeking all bird watcher and lovers.
Haiku:
Many song birds sung
Flew above the park's flowers
Two mating in midair
Couplet:
Warmth of spring air to the south
Bring migrating birds back home
Hi Barbara,
I would like to be an early bird to be part of Renga WS on birds:). Are you sure you would like to call it Renga 9 or should it be Renga 10?
Regards,
Raj
Hahaha. Yeah for sure 10
Me to - Me to
I would like to join! Lol :)
Barbara (A haiku) Just for you
Still Damn It! You win should have told me though lol:-
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Heard in the night air
Beautiful song summer airs
A nightingale sang.
Warm Summer evening rings out
Ears told with pure joyous sound.
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Just starters from me to work on, more birds coming as they crowd my mind,
Yours Ian xx
Ian.
This is lovely.
This Renga is Haiku only. You have a beautiful stream of Senyru here. Non are Haiku. I love them.
We will be helping (Mand) effectively write Haiku. We'll show the difference between a Senyru and a Haiku. Happy Senyru or Haiku sharing here on my blog. In the WS it will be strict Haiku. Lol.
Barbara
Damn it!
Lol cry baby
Sorry
Barbara
You cant have a Renga of Haiku only.
It is just Haiku 5-7-5 where a season is brought in.
When a series of Haiku are written it remains just that.
The Senryu is without nature still 5-7-5
The Renga can be a Haiku, with the addition of the two liner in between of 7-7..
I am not sure what you call it, it is not explained on the net that I can see.
I will leave you with my Nightingale Haiku to use and will follow the Workshop and take part as needed,
Yours as always Ian.T xx
Ian.
This is the second haiku only WS I've lead. I did it for Alid and raj. It was very successful. I thought you were there. Haiku is not just about season it is also about nature, animals, anything that is not human.
Haiku:
Heavy rain fall sky
Parking lot sudden river
Lighting struck pavement.
Couplet can be what ever.
Skies bright red and orange sunset
Drop behind rainstorm and wind.
Ian.
This is the second haiku only WS I've lead. I did it for Alid and raj. It was very successful. I thought you were there. Haiku is not just about season it is also about nature, animals, anything that is not human.
Haiku:
Heavy rain fall sky
Parking lot sudden river
Lighting struck pavement.
Couplet can be what ever.
Skies bright red and orange sunset
Drop behind rainstorm and wind.
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Ian.
Cry baby lol. Thank you for the nightingale haiku. I love it. But the keyword (heard)makes it a senyru. Did you read the blog? It's in the article.
Barbara
Let us all know when the WS gets under way. I did not see this WS listed on the Home Page with the list of other active Work shops. Please check on that so that new members spot it early.
Regards,
Raj
Okay will don't. Posting it tonight
Barbara
How about this?
Chirps getting louder
with one atop the other
both perched on a twig
flutter of colorful wings
in joyous mood of mating
Regards,
Raj
Really good. I like it. The only thing I think is the word. (Louder) gives it a senyru human touch, but doesn't make much difference in a haiku I don't think. There are many haiku on the net that's not so strict as Ian is pointing out.
For sake of this WS, since haiku is so hard to grasp for some. I think teaching it this way will make it easier for ppl new to Japanese poetry to get it a little better.
Barbara
I know what you mean. Although, I feel "louder" can also be considered in the context of birds listening to each other, I will work on changing it before posting it on the WS stream once you get it going.
Regards,
Raj
No need to change it. It's good as it is. I'm sure birds couldn't mate if they didn't hear the call et louder and louder. I was at swan lakes park in our town. And those birds were so loud and got even louder then I saw two mating in midair over the flowering bushes. Awesome sight. I never before saw that until last years.
Barbara
In terms of making noise during mating, i guess birds are no less noisier than humans though their language for communication is different if not actions, which are driven by passion and i believe more carefree than humans ..lol...
Regards,
WS posted
The workshop is up and open for enrollment. It don't officially start until Sunday. So bring all your haiku "birds behavior" and we'll start the renga with Mand giving her first haiku. The haiku and senyru her are great examples for comparing haiku and senyru.
Hi Barbara
I've posted this up just to see if I've at least got the gist! ( I think this is a tanka? )
A gang of starlings
a multi – coloured spectrum
glinting in the sun.
Winter migrates murmur sound
brushing a moving art form.
I'm looking forward to sunday!!!
Love Mand xxx
Mand
This is as perfect as a haiku can get. Thanks