Ian.T
Ian.T
Jul 31, 2014

Lonely Nights

This place seems so empty
The music in my ears so dull
Where are you all? Please call.

I sit here as the day passes
Thinking of things to do
Tempered by keys I cannot see.

Where are you out there?
That you seem to have forgotten me
The stars are dim or is it my eyes?

It is time for us all to share
Why do you just sit and stare
I will be here for as long as it takes

Your new day will bloom
Or the old one will cling to you
Damn I have things to share time is few.

Let us build bridges in ether clear
Find things for us to share
Dreams of being in other lands

I have walked with you for many years
Tell me now of all the cares
I will share them with you my friends

The new world may be it will soon end
Shall I wait for you all without cause?
Or are you going to have the balls.

To speak to me in this now

About This Poem

Last Few Words: SO!! I had a quarter of an hour before bed, to fill in, lol

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Leicestershire, Ex Moonraker, GBR

Favorite Poets: All those I meet or read about in my books

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Comments

alidzain

Nicely written. First time I see you lose gentle side in your poetry. Still busy visiting relatives for the season but I'll be here as soon as I can.

Alid

Ian.T

Thank you for your visit, yes sometimes I change the way I write, the Digit series and a few others are examples.
I do know swear words but avoid them as being illiterate but sometimes they attract attention.
Thanks again, Yours Ian.T
PS:- your priority is to look after your family, give them my best thoughts and extra for young Alid..

Barbara Writes

A lovely read. I had to check define "ether" bc I thought this maybe a error. A new word nice to have learn.