In his footsteps
Your Loneliness
will one day
some day…
make you an outstanding poet
which you already are
and you are now making a line
fine
out of your own condition,
this is outstanding
as you wish to live alone
without your family..
I had to spend just a day
and you know
tears rolled away
had to make tea,
for lunch,
so make not a mistake
your life can still be happy and gay,
no not the way of today
but old ways
and yet poetry will flow
like a river in Toronto
and as you is a USA'ite
perhaps Mississippi
will make your name flow
and heavens shall glow.
I am following your footsteps
Sir!
Comments
Loved
Written in praise of another is fine now come on it has the bones of a very good piece, yet you seem to flirt with the words that become softer.
Bring a little more toughness into your way and let us hear your words ring out, they are there at the end of your quill, they just need a nudge..
Yours as always Ian.T
kindly elaborate Ian below ur views
Bring a little more toughness???
into your way and let us hear your words ring out,????
they are there at the end of your quill, they just need .....a nudge..!!!!!!
like what???
who
is ":you"?
you know all ...over here
you know
who is who
and no not for you
this is for another who
I dare not say anything about you
you are the imbibing spirit in my minds eye
can any one challenge you ?
my, my you are above all
even the sky
who am I?
to say a word about you
my Master!
To Sir with obeisance
not love!
Loved
Your Poem or write is a little ambiguous, I would like to see more solid praise or whatever, just cant think of any poet that at the moment would be up to these lines so become fictitious and give the whole thing a body without a name.
Not sure what though it just seemed to slip below the praise level such a person should have.
Take care young Bard, Yours Ian.T
at times the last few drops in a wine tumbler
speak of the taste
oh what a waste ...
this guys a grace
and his footsteps often you too trace
and as Jess says for me and him ,
he too does whine for a praise
but with rhythmic grace