As sweet honeycomb
Pleasant words heal the spirit
Refreshing the soul.
An old proverb re-vamped.
Dec 23, 2010
Proverbs of faith
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Hi Shirl
Good to see! All and any help is welcome - I really appreciate your input. "Words Of Faith" sounds good - see how it goes with other suggestions.
Thanks Shirl - your a sweetie!
Love Mand xxxxxx
I really like...
this. It is also one of my favorite forms. I think I might have used a different word than [bones]. Maybe core, or something indicating the center of the body. All in all, a very thought provoking poem. ~ Gee
Hello Geezer
Good to see you. Yeh! good idea I'll work on that. I appreciate your imput.
Thanx Geezer!
Love Mand xxxxxx
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Hello my friend!
Good to see you! I've been experimenting with Senryu and Haiku. I'll try some other style out if I can.
Hope you are o.k - I will come by to see your poems soon - maybe not until Monday!! hopefully before.
Keep safe
Love Mand xxxxxxxxx
...and touch us all,
Oh sweet sweet the honeyed words
spread out their perfumed air
and touch us all,
and us enthral.
Sweet honeyed words
Spread their perfumes freely
Deep cure
Oh just messing Mand.
I like the thought behind this very much.
Love Ann.
Hiya Ann
Great to see you! Sounds like bacon! Ha ha only joking.
Love and hugs!
Mand xxxxxxxxxx
hheeelllloooooooo mand
well thought out Haiku...............stan
Ha ha ha,
Hheeellllloooooo. My husband speaks like that when he answers the phone - cracks me up.
Great to hear from ya.
Love to family and all
Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Thanks Xena
I hope you and Zak are o.k. I have to admit I hijacked the idea for this poem - because I really like the sentiments - so I kinda cheated.
glad you liked it.
Thanks for reading and commenting.
Loads of love
Mand xxxxxx
Hi Amalzamani
Wise words that help us live better lives.
Thanks for reading and commenting Amalzamani.
Love to you
Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxx
Helloo Seren
Soo good to see you. Glad you liked this little poem. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.
Love to you and your family.
Mand xxxxxxx
Hi Shirl
Your advice was excellent - I appreciate your input.
Thanks Shirl.
Love Mand xxxxxxxxx
my comment to this one
"ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh"..
Amend and Amen
Lovely!!!
Hello Mona
I agree - refreshing the soul - nice to have the soul refreshed.
Thanks for your encouragement Mona - always good to hear from you.
Love
Mand xxxxxxxxx