Alone to Think
I shall have to walk in glades of green
Or walk into my dark room there unseen
How could I ask which one to choose?
The greens have it I cannot lose.
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The softness under foot, peaceful touches
Where walking is a silent treasure to me.
The birds sing forth, though there’s only three
Say what you want from little ole me.
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I am here in this my sanctuary
Where my mind is brushed with perfumes
A felt tipped leaf touches my soul
As deeper in the forest I go
.
You cannot find me here as I blend unseen
No! don’t call me a chameleon
They hiss when others draw near
I am quiet here my mind is clear
.
The peace folds each moss covered bow
Nothing happens here some how
Would you dare to enter in
Best place to be, you cannot find me
.
I would ask you to walk and quiet be
Tranquillity is being alone, don’t you see
So when I return and you’re feeling low
Just ask me where, and when to go.
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Hello Ian
I have always enjoyed your poems.This one is no different. Love the way you share your world with us. A question though, I notice all the stanza 3's ending words didn't rhyme. Is that being done deliberately?
I am here in this my sanctuary
Where my mind is brushed with perfumes
A felt tipped leaf touches my soul
As deeper in the forest I go
Alid
Knowledge is a gift, health is wealth....
Ian
4am and I'm wondering when and where ? You would find me there...wonderful poem, only I too wondered at the end rhymes was it deliberate ? It did change the flow and pace but not in a bad way for me...
Lovely...
Much love always JC xxx
Ian
This poem has such a soft feel to it and while I walked through the verses you took me in a tranquil state... such is the magic of your word usage and poetic skill...thanks for posting and the experience..
Regards,
whether ur in a crowd or alone in the woods
I think
you alone can think
what you want to think
how can my presence or absence
help Ian
do tell me
do think
yes
all by yourself
friend
A lovely piece, Ian
http://soundcloud.com/jess-tapper/alone-to-think-by-ian-t-read/s-ND68N
the lines
The birds sing forth, though there’s only three [why say that? It feels gratuitous, like it's just for the rhyme]
The peace folds each moss covered bow [I stumbled on the reading 3 times before I realised you meant "bough"]
I would remove the extra spaces between lines.
Tranquility is what we all seek
for some moments, don't we?
Loved the theme and how you composed it.
the line
"I am here in this my sanctuary"
I think you need to remove either "this" or "my"
Thanks for sharing.