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Dec 30, 2010

G.T.H.O.O.H.(Get The Hell Out Of Here)

Hey old dude it's time you leave
you've been around for far too long
I know of no one who will grieve
you're as out of date as "Pong"

Your visit here has brought much stress
except for early in November
when we began cleaning up your mess
next to go? The great pretender

So here's your hat and what's your hurry
your leaving can't come soon enough
just melt away like a light flurry
am I being over gruff ?

Goodbye and don't hurry back
your replacement is almost here
let's hope he has all that you lack
his name is Happy, Happy New Year !

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just a quickie I threw together..............scribbler

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost

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Comments

M

Your metaphors are excellent and I just loved this one tremendously Stan. Great job. Happy New Yeat to you and the family

Love and Peace
Mona Marie
xoxox

S

good to see you come back ! thank you for reading and leaving such a kind comment on this rushed write. May your new year bring you peace and tranquility..................stan

S

You were close, it was a stinker of a year lol.................stan

S

I try to always hope for the best while preparing for the worst................stan

K

Awww, ((((((Stan!))))))

Happy New Year to you and your loved ones. It's not so bad when we have loved ones, right?

TBHNYPIR...SF. (the best happy new year poem I read) (so far) ;-)

~

R

raj

14 years 3 months ago

as Cranky..and Funny a write can get when coming from Mr, Stan !! LOL...

Wishing for the New Year to keep you in the best of cheer and humor...

warmly..

S

This past year was one well past for me lol. thanks for the visit.................stan

mand

mand

14 years 3 months ago

I hope that this, and all years henceforth will be happy for you and your family.

Love Mand xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Brilliant poem

S

There is joy to be found in every year just more in some than others. I hope year goes well for you and yours also.............stan

S

I hope both our years are better and am always glad to bring a smile to your face................stan