Silent Enemy

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I enjoyed the immediacy of the first line and how it plonks you somewhat in the midst of the action. I'm not sure however you've given us enough information about this 'silent enemy' for that phrase to be anything more than rather confusing and aloof. This poem feels like it needs fleshing out to me, as there is little substance and a storyline that is hard to follow. Also, just a easily fixable spelling mistake, "Knowing they too are hunted" - you missed the second 'o' in too.

Keep at it though! : )
Liam

Firstly Welcome to Neopoet and I hope your walk with us will be a pleasure of learning.
Your first piece here is very good just needs a clarification as to who is stalking you, unless it is the curse of your own self fears.
One place you used Pray did you mean Prey.
Take care see more of your writes soon, Yours Ian.T

and a warm welcome to the Neo.
I am happy to have you as a new member at Neo. I am sure you'll have an enjoyable time.
Back to your first post, I would list your piece under dark poetry which, might not be my cup of tea, yet still many's favorite.
One thing I need to question about the title "Silent Enemy" then you've immediately started with "They"
I think you need either to say "Silent Enemies" or Keep it as is but later refere to it as "it/he/ she" unless there is something I am missing here.
I am looking forward to reading your next posts.
Welcome again.

Much has already been commented upon by Ian, Doomhead and Rula. I too welcome you to this community and look forward to read more of your posts.

Regards.

Welcome to Neopoet, Sharon. I love the suspense in this one but I have to agree that there is a need to tell more about the silent enemy as it's in the title and the theme of the poem. Other than that, I'll say this is a good dark poem. Hope to read more of your works..

Alid