Youth is that fountain....which must one day dry
no matter how much one may try
youth does die
but in form of aging skin and balding hair
but the heart within remains youthful...
till aging...
is an age passed dream
youth remains within we still need only watering
what a youth we all have enjoyed...
reading our past in your lovely verse
‘tis as if yesterday we were in youth...
now 'tis worse...
left in memories as in this youthful verse
let youth be the comma of our life...
not a coma
where youthful memories die
within our lonely hearts we cry
Oh youth why did you have to come
just to, simply pass by
tell me why
O just why!
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Yup
There’s no right or wrong answer. But youth is for learning lessons you won’t fully get until it’s gone and you’re pontifical about the reasons why.
Loved this one.
Tim
thanks
Tim and as CATS agreed with you incl Cats too
yes!
what Tim said!
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I totally get where you're coming from! Stupid thing is, those youthful years seem like yesterday while yesterday seems like an eternity ago. Nice poem. I would recommend punctuating unless you want to make the meaning variable. (I sometimes do this: deliberately not punctuate so lines can be read in different ways to get different meanings.)
HALF BLIND breathless deafy too
what else can expect you OF A NOBEL I have no clue so as it is may do many have read it on other sites clapped too
SO THANK YOU
So thisis the rework of “ secret poem time yet will post as per”
Nicely done, makes more sense to me this way.