lovedly
lovedly
Sep 06, 2021

Your Love

Your love
I seek
you are mine
within reach
searching you
on every beach
come love me
I'm within reach''

SEARCHING INSTEAD OF SEEKING HOWZ IT NOW STAN AND GEE

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: UNIVERSE...ETERNITY C/O ME, ROU

Favorite Poets: All across the Internet whom I read

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Comments

Geezer

think on it, it's too early to get philosophical! ~ Geez.
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S

Line 5 is kinda off to me. Maybe change search to seeking? Otherwise enjoyable

Geezer

there is nothing philosophical about it after-all. You're just a horny old goat! Yes, trade search for seeking, feels better that way. ~ Geez.
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lovedly

with you and stan coz u both are masters but give it a second thought as UNREQUITED LOVE NOT HORNY passing time composed this when I WAS what you say GEE
horror knee
yesterday I LOST MY PW today I have noted somewhere HAPPY DAY

Geezer

I see the unrequited love part, and yes, it sounds better. Sorry, didn't mean to be flip with my critique. Short and sweet, I see you on the beach, lounging on a blanket, sipping a cool drink with your dark shades and roaming eyes. ~ Geez.
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