You are
Everything I’m about to tell you
Is coming from the bottom of my heart
From the first time I saw you
Your beauty
Hit me like an arrow to the heart
You are
The most amazing person I have ever met
Going go out of your way to make ends meet
There is no one else like you
You are one of a kind
That’s what makes you so special to me
You are
The Answer to all my prayers
The starts of my dreams come true
The key to a new beginning
You are!!!
You are
My tree at which I look to lean on
The tissue at which I may cry on
And one day the finger I may put the ring on
You are!!
You are
The one for me
And together we shall see
Where the journey in life shall take us
Wherever that may be
You ARE!!
You are
The wind blowing through the autumn trees
The moon that shines the way
You are!!!
You are
The word to every book
The lead at which I write with
You Are!!!
I can go on and on
Days for days
Talking and talking
Just describing
The things
You are!!!
Jan 26, 2016
You are
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Hello Kutter
Welcome to Neopoet...I took a quick peek at your profile and I am amazed that at your young age you have taken to writing poetry..."You are" is a good poem ..i liked the flow which runs smoothly and good word usage...
I am sure you will find Neopoet to sharpen your skills by reading poems of many stalwarts here who have polished their skills ..
There would be workshops from which you would be able to have many take aways...please take criticism by fellow members positively and do not be offended ...i will look forward to read more of your posts ..in the drop down menu under "workshops" you will find active workshop/s which may interest you..
Best wishes...
Hello Kk
and a warm welcome to Neopoet.
I agree with raj and look forward to reading more of yours.
welcome again.
So yes, welcome.
The poem is an emotional rant that works on some levels, but it needs more "control" in it's language use (poetically speaking). I hope you look in on some of the workshops. Honed a bit, your poetry could be excellent.
Welcome to NeoPoet. As someone else said, take the critiques in a positive way. NeoPoet can be a tough place to post, but it's because everyone is focused on improving each other's poetry. A lot of "raw truth" is coming your way. Use it. Change your poetry so it can be much more.
Welcome and the best of luck to you.
Post more and be sure to critique other poets. Not comment on the poetry... critique it. Tell them what you liked and what you did not. And be genuine. Honest.
Welcome... You have work to do.