Worm-tongue
I spied him, there
from my position
in the deeper shadows.
marked him,
vowed to unearth his game.
he, crouching in weeds
peeking in windows
gathering dirt
invisible, cloaked
in the lie of "compatriot"
call him, "Luke"
his cohorts: "Mathew"
and don't forget "John"
the lead roach,
who holds the leashes
of the hell-hounds
on my trail.
I spied him hiding upon his hands and knees
A demonic smile worn across his face
Calculating and devious he watched my every move
I led him along a merry dance where I took him for the fool he was
With my misdirection and false moves he fell into the pit I had dug
I smiled a fake smile as our eyes locked for a second
He’d been caught, I had shown him for what he was
I left him to make 5 from adding 2 to 2
I let him leave to report his findings…this game had only begun
He had fallen into my trap, where only I knew the lyrics to the song I sang.
Comments
A fine tale...
As I read this, I espied a number of places that could've been rhymed easily. I felt that you were holding back; but it is your work and if you choose not to... I thoroughly enjoyed the chase! I sincerely hope that you enjoyed writing this as much as I enjoyed the reading. Thank you!
~ Geez.
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dear Geezer,
sometimes it is a good idea to hold back and allow the reader to fill in the blanks. this is what I intended. I'm glad you enjoyed it. but let's not forget my co-author's part in this poem. I think that he (one) was particularly brilliant!
*hugs, Cat
I understand that...
it is a co-write, maybe I should have said: You all seemed to be holding back, [I meant with the rhyme], but the story by the three of you was right in lockstep! I enjoyed the three of your writing as much as I hope you all enjoyed writing it! I particularly enjoyed this one, it gives great insight to the spy business.
~ Geez.
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Gee
Thanks for the assessment. We deliberately didn’t rhyme to give it a more awkward stance. The only deliberate rhyme was the final two lines.
It was good to co-write again as that is the one thing I do miss being a solitary writer. Cat’s always so easy to write with, I tend to follow her lead which out if my comfort zone but seems to work when writing with Cat.
Anyway, cheers for the read & feedback.
One.
Sis
I absolutely love the second stanza nearly as much as the first one. Which one did I write again?
Regards
One.
dear One,
do you know what a joy you are for me??? you make me laugh, LOL!
*hugs, Sis