Geezer
Geezer
Aug 14, 2022

Who Cares, Row Back to Where You Came From...

Egos abound in the world of art
some think they have no peers
I have news for you, my pretty fool
Egos have no place between the ears

Just to respond to job well done
won't require much
You're smart, it's true, but know that you
will lose out, being out of touch

Rhyming schemes sure can be hard
I know it's true
I don't flaunt it, I've got it
But then, I am not like you

Drop your work somewhere else
See it float
Shitty attitudes do
You've got a sinking boat

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe

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Comments

S

sounds like somebody's ego pissed you off. now back to the poem. The rhyme scheme you have used can be a hard one to carry out. It makes the meter even more important (ME????about to lecture on meter? lmao. Let me see if I can give some ideas on how the meter can be helped a bit :
Egos abound in the world of art
some think they have no peers
I have news for you, my pretty fool
Egos have no place between the ears

To not respond to job well done
never requires much
You're smart, it's true, but know that you
will lose out, being out of touch

Rhyming schemes sure can be hard
This I know is true
I don't flaunt it, I understand
But then, again I am not like you

Drop your work somewhere else
See it splash and float
Crappy attitudes usually do
You've got a stinking boat

I hope this poem isn't directed my way

Geezer

Yes, it does have something to do with someone's ego pissing me off. The rhyme scheme is supposed to be one of a descending order:
Nine, six, nine, nine
Eight, five, eight, eight
Seven, four, seven, seven
Six, three, six, six

Thank you for the excellent job of fixing my rhyme scheme, but it is purposefully done this way.
Look for the person that has gotten lots of praise for their work, and not even bothered to send a thank you.
~ Geez.
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Candlewitch

what I have to say, cannot be said here. but I am feeling the same. look for a p.m.

*hugs, from "us" Cat

lovedly

You do me relieve
my hearts been thumping still
and
now I've been holding it
lest it killed me stone still

I am now back home
my heart is well
my voice stable
my lungs filled with air

O friendly Gee
how you strugglers help
God yours be with you
thank him on my behalf too
will you

Geezer

that you were perturbed by my rant. I realize now that it is/was very unprofessional of me. I should be better than this! I beg the pardon of my fellow poets. ~ Geezer.
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Rosewood Apothecary

Well I hope that I am not the object of your ire.

I guess that’s why we write,
Words are softer than fists
But you can still level people
With a well timed phrase

Tim